Sonia's evaluation:
Your lead-in is really compelling and quickly drew the attention of the audience by offering the example of your brother.
(though it's fictional) Slowing speaking speed also better your introduction and the each section( intro., body, conclusion) is connected with nice transitions. You make your speech effective by using of the body language, presenting the audience a lively speech rather than a dull one which inform the knowledge of sleepwalking.
However, some professional terms introduced in your speech buffled the audience and sometimes make us hard to catch up your meanings. Perhaps next time you can use visual aids to help ameliorate this weakness.
Overall, your speech is informative to let the audience explore the distant reasons behind the sleepwalking. What's more, nice organization is another merit to get the audience quickly to go into your speech. 2010/10/6
Sonia's evaluation:
Your lead-in is really compelling and quickly drew the attention of the audience by offering the example of your brother.
(though it's fictional) Slowing speaking speed also better your introduction and the each section( intro., body, conclusion) is connected with nice transitions. You make your speech effective by using of the body language, presenting the audience a lively speech rather than a dull one which inform the knowledge of sleepwalking.
However, some professional terms introduced in your speech buffled the audience and sometimes make us hard to catch up your meanings. Perhaps next time you can use visual aids to help ameliorate this weakness.
Overall, your speech is informative to let the audience explore the distant reasons behind the sleepwalking. What's more, nice organization is another merit to get the audience quickly to go into your speech. 2010/10/6