1.Sophia and Tarrie
Topic: Sleepwalking
Comments:
This topic is interesting to me because I had this problem when I was little. However, it may not be a topic related to everyone so the knowledge and information they provided may be useless to most of the audience. They need to make some effort to make this speech worth listening.
I think Sophia did a great job on this speech because she controlled her speed very well and elaborated her story with many gestures. In addition, she made interesting expressions along with Tarrie's speaking. It's helpful to keep the audience awake and catch our attention. As for Tarrie, her pronouciation is fine but there seems to be no intonation in her speech. It's hard to concentrate on the speech if the speaker speaks in a low voice and flat tone. She can improve her part by adding vocal variety. Besides, they should be careful with some medical terms because sometimes it's difficult to understand without clear explanation. Generally speaking, their speech went smoothly from the beginning to the end and did provide some interesting information for me.
2. Mallory and Sonia
Topic: Borderline Personality Disorder
Comments:
It's very interesting to begin the speech with the small test which made the speech interactively. It not only helped us to examine ourselves whether we have this problem but also gave us a brief understanding of BPD. They organized the speech well and had credibility. The PPT should help explain some terms that the audience may not understand but it didn't work effectively because some explanations are still difficult to understand, and it went so fast that I couldn't remember most of the information.
Mallory did a good job on explaining what is BPD but she need to be careful with her pronounciation. Sometimes it sounds like "BPT" when she said "BPD" and that's pretty confusing. Sonia looked nervous while she's talking and lost eye contact with her audience. I think it's important for the speaker to be relaxed especially when the topic is about psychology--otherwise, the audience will not be convinced.
Sonia's evaluation:
Your lively beginning really impresses the audience! You clearly get across the messages and demonstrate the steps of CPR with catchy words. Your topic is challenging and easily to bore the audience but surprisingly, the transition is smooth, leaving no feeling of dullness. The alternate act and speech between you and Jeff deepen the impressions as well. In addition, the small slips of CPR steps passed around at the end of the speech are useful to help the audience who missed some context of your speech.
Perhaps next time you can slow down the speed to prevent a feeling of rush and hastiness.
Overall, it's a enlightening speech with both information and fun in it.
2010/10/6
Sophia’ evaluation: Your speech was the most dramatic one; you made your speech a performance rather than mere an oral speaking. The opening did refresh me from dozing off. At first, I thought your topic would be boring, but you really astonished me by showing your speech in such a creative way. However, I thought your speech is less informative than others. It was more like an instruction of CPR rather than a speech on CPR since you provided not so abundant and precise information for your fear of boring audience with too many professional terms. Thus, you have to balance the academic part and interesting part of your speech. For Sue’s personal comment, all you had to do is slow down your speech speed; otherwise, it’s totally perfect. Your speech is smooth and hilarious. Actually, you made me wanna laugh all the time when you were speaking. To sum up, I thought you really did a good job. You came up many creative ideas to vivify this speech. Besides, your little cards were also helpful.
Persuasive Speech Evaluation
Speakers: Sue, Tarrie and Lori Evaluators: Sonia, June and Hannah
Topic: Money Donation
Strengths: 1. The opening experience (with photos to prove) and the speaker’s tone immediately capture the audience’s attention. 2. The transition between the opening example and the topic “Money Donation” is smooth.
3. The introduction of the method to donate money is very clear and straightforward. 4. The usage of PPT is fine (lots of pictures).
Some advice: 1. The opening and closing experience was nice and touching but it seems that it only focus on the issue of “children.” 2. It may be helpful for the speakers to show some specialized terms on their PPT so that the audience can match them up with the pictures right away, since the audience may not be as familiar with the terms as the speakers are. 3. Eye contact is a little weak sometimes. 4. There must be some people who have financial problem at home, so it may not be suitable for them to donate money monthly right now as college students. Maybe some alternatives can be provided instead of asking them to save money from buying beverages for the money donation.
Evaluations of Speeches
1.Sophia and Tarrie
Topic: Sleepwalking
Comments:
This topic is interesting to me because I had this problem when I was little. However, it may not be a topic related to everyone so the knowledge and information they provided may be useless to most of the audience. They need to make some effort to make this speech worth listening.
I think Sophia did a great job on this speech because she controlled her speed very well and elaborated her story with many gestures. In addition, she made interesting expressions along with Tarrie's speaking. It's helpful to keep the audience awake and catch our attention. As for Tarrie, her pronouciation is fine but there seems to be no intonation in her speech. It's hard to concentrate on the speech if the speaker speaks in a low voice and flat tone. She can improve her part by adding vocal variety. Besides, they should be careful with some medical terms because sometimes it's difficult to understand without clear explanation. Generally speaking, their speech went smoothly from the beginning to the end and did provide some interesting information for me.
2. Mallory and Sonia
Topic: Borderline Personality Disorder
Comments:
It's very interesting to begin the speech with the small test which made the speech interactively. It not only helped us to examine ourselves whether we have this problem but also gave us a brief understanding of BPD. They organized the speech well and had credibility. The PPT should help explain some terms that the audience may not understand but it didn't work effectively because some explanations are still difficult to understand, and it went so fast that I couldn't remember most of the information.
Mallory did a good job on explaining what is BPD but she need to be careful with her pronounciation. Sometimes it sounds like "BPT" when she said "BPD" and that's pretty confusing. Sonia looked nervous while she's talking and lost eye contact with her audience. I think it's important for the speaker to be relaxed especially when the topic is about psychology--otherwise, the audience will not be convinced.
Sonia's evaluation:
Your lively beginning really impresses the audience! You clearly get across the messages and demonstrate the steps of CPR with catchy words. Your topic is challenging and easily to bore the audience but surprisingly, the transition is smooth, leaving no feeling of dullness. The alternate act and speech between you and Jeff deepen the impressions as well. In addition, the small slips of CPR steps passed around at the end of the speech are useful to help the audience who missed some context of your speech.
Perhaps next time you can slow down the speed to prevent a feeling of rush and hastiness.
Overall, it's a enlightening speech with both information and fun in it.
2010/10/6
Sophia’ evaluation:
Your speech was the most dramatic one; you made your speech a performance rather than mere an oral speaking. The opening did refresh me from dozing off. At first, I thought your topic would be boring, but you really astonished me by showing your speech in such a creative way. However, I thought your speech is less informative than others. It was more like an instruction of CPR rather than a speech on CPR since you provided not so abundant and precise information for your fear of boring audience with too many professional terms. Thus, you have to balance the academic part and interesting part of your speech.
For Sue’s personal comment, all you had to do is slow down your speech speed; otherwise, it’s totally perfect. Your speech is smooth and hilarious. Actually, you made me wanna laugh all the time when you were speaking.
To sum up, I thought you really did a good job. You came up many creative ideas to vivify this speech. Besides, your little cards were also helpful.
Persuasive Speech Evaluation
Speakers: Sue, Tarrie and Lori
Evaluators: Sonia, June and Hannah
Topic: Money Donation
Strengths:
1. The opening experience (with photos to prove) and the speaker’s tone immediately capture the audience’s attention.
2. The transition between the opening example and the topic “Money Donation” is smooth.
3. The introduction of the method to donate money is very clear and straightforward.
4. The usage of PPT is fine (lots of pictures).
Some advice:
1. The opening and closing experience was nice and touching but it seems that it only focus on the issue of “children.”
2. It may be helpful for the speakers to show some specialized terms on their PPT so that the audience can match them up with the pictures right away, since the audience may not be as familiar with the terms as the speakers are.
3. Eye contact is a little weak sometimes.
4. There must be some people who have financial problem at home, so it may not be suitable for them to donate money monthly right now as college students. Maybe some alternatives can be provided instead of asking them to save money from buying beverages for the money donation.