Your lead-in is really compelling and quickly drew the attention of the audience by offering the example of your brother. (though it's fictional) Slowing speaking speed also better your introduction and the each section( intro., body, conclusion) is connected with nice transitions. You make your speech effective by using of the body language, presenting the audience a lively speech rather than a dull one which inform the knowledge of sleepwalking. However, some professional terms introduced in your speech buffled the audience and sometimes make us hard to catch up your meaning. Perhaps next time you can use visual aids to help ameliorate this weakness.
Persuasive Speech Evaluation Speakers: Sue, Tarrie and Lori Evaluators: Sonia, June and Hannah Topic: Money Donation Strengths: 1.The opening experience (with photos to prove) and the speaker’s tone immediately capture the audience’s attention. 2.The transition between the opening example and the topic “Money Donation” is smooth. 3.The introduction of the method to donate money is very clear and straightforward. 4.The usage of PPT is fine (lots of pictures). Some advice: 1.The opening and closing experience was nice and touching but it seems that it only focus on the issue of “children.” 2.It may be helpful for the speakers to show some specialized terms on their PPT so that the audience can match them up with the pictures right away, since the audience may not be as familiar with the terms as the speakers are. 3.Eye contact is a little weak sometimes. 4.There must be some people who have financial problem at home, so it may not be suitable for them to donate money monthly right now as college students. Maybe some alternatives can be provided instead of asking them to save money from buying beverages for the money donation.
Sonia's evaluation:
Your lead-in is really compelling and quickly drew the attention of the audience by offering the example of your brother.
(though it's fictional) Slowing speaking speed also better your introduction and the each section( intro., body, conclusion) is connected with nice transitions. You make your speech effective by using of the body language, presenting the audience a lively speech rather than a dull one which inform the knowledge of sleepwalking.
However, some professional terms introduced in your speech buffled the audience and sometimes make us hard to catch up your meaning. Perhaps next time you can use visual aids to help ameliorate this weakness.
Persuasive Speech Evaluation
Speakers: Sue, Tarrie and Lori
Evaluators: Sonia, June and Hannah
Topic: Money Donation
Strengths:
1. The opening experience (with photos to prove) and the speaker’s tone immediately capture the audience’s attention.
2. The transition between the opening example and the topic “Money Donation” is smooth.
3. The introduction of the method to donate money is very clear and straightforward.
4. The usage of PPT is fine (lots of pictures).
Some advice:
1. The opening and closing experience was nice and touching but it seems that it only focus on the issue of “children.”
2. It may be helpful for the speakers to show some specialized terms on their PPT so that the audience can match them up with the pictures right away, since the audience may not be as familiar with the terms as the speakers are.
3. Eye contact is a little weak sometimes.
4. There must be some people who have financial problem at home, so it may not be suitable for them to donate money monthly right now as college students. Maybe some alternatives can be provided instead of asking them to save money from buying beverages for the money donation.